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You recently went to see a good play at a theatre, but you did not enjoy it because of some problems in the theatre. Write a letter to the manager of the theatre. In your letter: •say which play you saw and when •describe the problems you experienced in the theatre •suggest what the manager should do

#theatre #manager #•say #•describe #•suggest
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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about the problems faced at the
theatre
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 to the manager of the
theatre
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. My name is Ramanpreet and yesterday I went to your
theatre
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 named 'Fun Night' with some of my friends to see a comedy show. I enjoyed the show thoroughly but I faced some hurdles over there.
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, the seats were outdated and the place was not so spacious.
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, a foul smell was coming from all over the
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 which disturbed me endlessly .
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, there was no proper seating arrangement as I had to sit far away from my friends. Some proactive measures should be included for its betterment. Renovation of the place is required with a proper seating arrangement and with modern seats .
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,
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 staff should create a pleasant smell and should discard any stuff which can cause an odour smell inside . I hope you will consider my above suggestions with a prompt reply . Yours Faithfully, Ramanpreet
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coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, 'Some proactive measures should be included for its betterment' can be clearer.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all ideas in a paragraph are related to maintain unity. Some paragraphs contain mixed ideas.
task achievement
Elaborate more on how the issues affected your experience of the play for a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, adhering to formal letter structure.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate, maintaining formality and politeness.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • recently
  • unfortunate
  • disruptive
  • acoustics
  • ventilation
  • uncomfortable
  • distracting
  • performance
  • detract
  • constructive
  • upgrade
  • recommend
  • resolve
  • enhance
  • etiquette
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