With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As the society develops, more conflicts and problems occur than in the past. There
are
Suggestion
is
someone arguing that humans should not allocate money on universe discovery as it is considered to be a waste, they suppose that money ought to be invested in other practical stuffs. From my point of view, I completely disagree with
this
statement for some fundamental reasons that will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, reaching to the milky way could give global citizens deeper knowledge about the stars and humans might
then
easily explain some nature phenomenon
such
as tides, eclipses, shooting stars,… with science-based and reasonable
explaination
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanation
, not just with traditional folk stories. Governments need to have a separate fund for space researches in order to ensure the amount of money used for other necessities.
Furthermore
, film producers these days tend to generate blockbusters containing spacial plots and scenes to serve the audiences like
Independent
Suggestion
Independence
Day or Marvel series.
Secondly
, by discovering the universe, scientists would find out which planets are similar to the Earth by getting information, collecting samples from those planets and doing
researches
Suggestion
research
. In fact, there are many planets having been destroyed by outside impacts and our Earth seems not to be the exception.
As a result
, the purpose of space exploration is to find out a potential alternative home for earth dwellers in the future.
In addition
, discovering the galaxy allow humans to know more about the enormous world outside the Earth, which might give people chances to reach the
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
of
alliens
not contained in or deriving from the essential nature of something
aliens
liens
and other civilizations.
Consequently
, residents could learn from them and apply these new knowledge into our daily lives. In conclusion, I am in
favor
promote over another
favour
that space discovery is an important industry in
this
cutting edge world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • living standards
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