With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#troubles #world #money #space #exploration #waste

As the society develops, more conflicts and problems occur than in the past. There

are

Suggestion

someone arguing that humans should not allocate money on universe discovery as it is considered to be a waste, they suppose that money ought to be invested in other practical stuffs. From my point of view, I completely disagree with

this

statement for some fundamental reasons that will be

analyzed

examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts

analysed

in the following paragraphs.

Firstly

, reaching to the milky way could give global citizens deeper knowledge about the stars and humans might

then

easily explain some nature phenomenon

such

as tides, eclipses, shooting stars,… with science-based and reasonable

explaination

a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.

explanation

, not just with traditional folk stories. Governments need to have a separate fund for space researches in order to ensure the amount of money used for other necessities.

Furthermore

, film producers these days tend to generate blockbusters containing spacial plots and scenes to serve the audiences like

Independent

Suggestion

Independence

Day or Marvel series.

Secondly

, by discovering the universe, scientists would find out which planets are similar to the Earth by getting information, collecting samples from those planets and doing

researches

Suggestion

research

. In fact, there are many planets having been destroyed by outside impacts and our Earth seems not to be the exception.

As a result

, the purpose of space exploration is to find out a potential alternative home for earth dwellers in the future.

In addition

, discovering the galaxy allow humans to know more about the enormous world outside the Earth, which might give people chances to reach the

existance

the state or fact of existing

existence

alliens

not contained in or deriving from the essential nature of something

aliens

liens

and other civilizations.

Consequently

, residents could learn from them and apply these new knowledge into our daily lives. In conclusion, I am in

favor

promote over another

favour

that space discovery is an important industry in

this

cutting edge world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

290 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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