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Some employees want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

#employees #contact #staff #times #holidays #development
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Today's modern
world many
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world, many
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employee
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employees
for
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in
from
 different areas is working together.Around the globe
employee
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 can meet with one another.
Employee
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 for various areas feel more comfortable if they will live together all
time
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.My reasons for
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 view are personal and professional. From a personal perspective,
Employee
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 can help each other to learn more regarding their job.Scarce
employee
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find
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finds
 more information
of
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about
on
 work when they are working.They are able to mitigate
thair
of them or themselves
their
 threat by themselves when they are alone.
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Consequently they
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Consequently, they
 feel more comfortable when they are
contact
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contacted
 with staff.They
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also knows
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also know
 the values of contacting people. According to personal
vieew
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
views
,
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,
a big advantage is if they live
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 they lose all their
time
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.
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.
They are compromised and lose all their life privacy.They feel tremendous
pressur
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
 every
time
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.
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Also they
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Also, they
 are not able to do proper
time
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 to their family.All
time
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 their mind stressed with work. From a professional perspective
,
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,
employees are working together in a company.These companies get more progress when they are in
connection
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 all
time
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.
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For
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example by
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example, by
 using
latest technology moble phone
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the latest technology mobile phone
latest technology mobile phone
 they are able to connect with each other and discuss about
problems face in
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problems facing
problems facing in
problems faced in
 their company.By using
this
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 latest technology they are
reached
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reaching
 peak performers in
future
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the future
.Professionally highlight
this
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 company that
succeed
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succeeds
 with their
emploee
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employees
employer
connection
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 all
time
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.So a lot of
time
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 they update by their employees. It is
also
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bad effect
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a bad effect
 professionally that
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employee waste lot
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employee waste lots
 of
time
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 when they are in
connection
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.Even they are not able to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
somthing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
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own
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owner
. In conclusion
,
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,
Connection
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 between
employee
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 is necessary nowadays.Employees working with fully confidence when in
connection
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.In my opinion
time
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 is
more precious
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most precious
 resource: everyone should
known
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know
 the dignity and glory of
time
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.

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