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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer possible solutions to it.

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Education
 standard declined with the passage of time. Previously, we
were having
Suggestion
had
 only
one
system
 of
education
 in a country.
However
, now we are offering more than
one
system
 in the country. Parents were more concern and want their children to get professional
education
. In early ages, especially mother gave proper time to their children. There
were
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was
 no concept of
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 culture. Now, students totally dependent on tutor and whatever
tutor teach
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tutor, teach
 parents thinks it will be good for our children. Competition
also
 increased, parents were happy with the good grades of their children
before but
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before, but
 now every parent
want
Suggestion
wants
 their child to get 100%. Teachers were
also
 very honest with their profession
before but
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before, but
 now it's only business for schools. People chose
this
 profession to make money only. Different systems of
education
is
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are
also
one
 of the
reason
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reasons
 of
declined
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decline
declines
 of standard of
education
. Parents should take responsibility of their children. They must supervise their
youngers especially
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younger, especially
younger especially
. Parents should accept the ability of their children and encourage them to get good
marks but
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marks, but
 don't force them to study more than their strength. Government should take an action of
different
Suggestion
different systems
a different system
system
 of educations. They should allow only
one
system
 so, all children will get the same standard of
education
. By
this
 way teachers will
also
 more focus on the allowed
system
. I
am totally agree
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totally agree
 with
this
 that
education standard
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the education standard
 declined. Parents, Teachers,
Schools and
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Schools, and
 Government all are responsible for
this
. All actions should be taken with the earliest convenience. So, if we work
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
, we will improve our
system
 of
education
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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