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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social and practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Owing to the need to communicate in the local dialect of the region where you reside, it has been suggested by some that
this
 could lead to some social issues. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 discussion as
this
 could
also
 cause misunderstanding and segregation among people.
To begin
 with, having to speak in
vernacular
Suggestion
the vernacular
 could lead to misunderstanding between the foreigner and the nationals who will
also
 give responses that are out of context. When carrying out a transaction between two parties, it is important to speak in terms that are clear and unambiguous in order to eliminate distrust which could amount to
conflict
Suggestion
a conflict
.
For instance
, a friend of mine went to the local market to purchase an Ornament from a Fulani
merchant but
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merchant, but
 ended up coming home empty handed because the seller does not understand English so it was difficult for her to engage in negotiation with him. Another point to consider is that there will be a negative effect on the
adaption
the act of accepting with approval; favorable reception
adoption
adaptation
 of
immigrants which
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immigrants, which
 will lead to segregation among people in
such
 territory who would have loved to familiarise themselves with the
locals but
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locals, but
 the gap in
speech pose
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speech, pose
 as a threat to achieving
this
 goal which prompts them to form small ethnic groups, brotherhood or clubs which consist of people who they believe are similar to them.
For instance
, people who fall into
this
 category tries to avoid public places like parks, beach, grocery shops or even churches in order not to interact or converse with people. In conclusion, staying in a state where you are required to speak in their native tongue could lead to misinterpretation, distrust and segregation among people within
such
 vicinity.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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