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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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Each day tons of
food
 is being wasted in many ways in the world.The major wastage is happening with teenagers because they don't know the importance of the
food
 and the effects
by
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of
 wasting it. Primarily
,
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,
parent's are responsible for
this
 immature behaviour.They don't teach their children the importance of
food
.As when they grow up they will join in the hostels and do the same thing there of course the teachers have the responsibility to look after them and advising them to not waste
food
,
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,
but students
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are not obedient to listen after teacher.
Secondly
,
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,
Events like marriage have the greater part in wasting
food
 because they will cook the
food
 to the maximum because in the middle of the marriage if the
food
 get's
completed
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completed, then
then
 it will be
status issue
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a status issue
status issues
 for them so they cook for the maximum. The worst part is if the people haven't appeared
for
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in
 the
wedding
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wedding, then
then
 the remaining
food
 is all wasted. In conclusion
,
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,
it is
healthy
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the healthiest
 way to educate children to not waste
food
 from the childhood and
also
 it is important to cook only for the confirmed members.

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