Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

I DISAGREE Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays
this
football. There
are dividing
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are divided
into 3
division
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divisions
:
division
one
,
division
two
and
division
three. Each
divisions
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division
have
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has
different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the
one
who
teachs
impart skills or knowledge to
teaches
teach
touches
the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
, the team can earn a
lot
. If we compare the income in
division
one
and
division
two
are really different. The
division
one
will get more than
division
two
.
Because as
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Because, as
we know, the team in
division
one
, they
shows
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show
to the people that they are able to play better than the others.
For example
: David Beckham (the player of
Manchaster
a city in northwestern England (30 miles to the east of Liverpool); heart of the most densely populated area of England
Manchester
United). He can earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about£11O.OOO/
year
.
Secondly
, they can get a
lot
of spectators which makes the income increased. In
one
match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For
one
ticket (VIP) it can cost us a
lot
of money. I think for about £100 or over.
That is
for
one
person. How if we count for a million person? There are
also
many disadvantages: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and
also
the clothes which
shown they
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shown, they
’re sad about that. There are other sport games like tennis. Tennis is
also
popular. In playing tennis there are
also
have advantages and disadvantages.
This
games
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game
shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a
lot
of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are
also
have disadvantages of
this games
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this game
these games
,
for example
:
two
years ago, when Monica Sales and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each
other
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other, then one
then
,
one
of the Steffi’s
fan
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fans
can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots) Monica Sales. That makes Monica Sales have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes Monica Sales stopped from playing tennis for about a
year
. But
now
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Now
, she has started again. In my opinion, these
sport
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sports
can ease the international tensions and
also
can
makedeath
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make death
from
year
to
year
become increase. So, it is very dangerous.
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