You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter : 1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. 2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. 3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.

Dear Chan, I am glad to hear from you after
such
a long time. though I do not know if I am the right person to suggest,
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as a response to your letter I would definitely
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you to look for
job
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,
instead
of joining college. I totally believe that
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employment will give you far more pleasure than theoretical study considering the fact that being in actual film production is all you have dreamed for your whole life. Not only for self-satisfaction
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but getting a post even in
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position in
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industry counts more than
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degree. it will offer
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option which will ultimately open new doors for you. Not to forget, you will gather tons of technical skills while sharping your artistic vision from
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fellow filmmakers and crews! so, starting
career
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immediately is
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wise decision to take. Making the
first
footstep in
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showbiz is the hardest part. so I will force you to look for vacancies in
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or assistant director section. though both of these have the most
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and challenging schedule,
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it
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will push you close to your dream job. What's more, you can apply for "extra" roles as it can help you to work in big studio films. if you have expertise
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video editing,
then
give me a buzz! I have a friend who owns the leading post-production company
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the city and I will be thrilled to put you up in touch with him. I can't wait to hear which path you choose to go. so write
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as soon as you take the
next
step! Best, Shahla
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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