In developing countries, rural children have less access to education.some people say that this problem is solved by providing teachers and schools. Other think that computer and internet should be provided. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In developing nations, rural children are less accessible to education. Providing schools and teachers
is
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are
the key factor to solve
this
problem is suggested by some of the people, while others hold the view that the facility of computers and
internet
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the internet
must be provided.
However
, I agree with the former view. On the one hand, providing teachers and schools to rural children is very effective is said by some people. The reason behind their opinion is that a student can give interest to study with concentration by seeing the others age mates him.
Also
schools are the place where children can develop their essential skills
such
as cooperation, coordination, communication skills, teamwork, which will be very useful for their future success.
Moreover
, with the help of their
teachers they
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teachers, they
can able to make differences between positive and negative. As it is believed that teachers are the
second
parents of children.
Therefore
, if there is an availability of teachers in every rural
area
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area, then
then
no student will not
deprived
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deprive
from
study
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the study
.
On the other hand
, some people think that only facility of computer and internet should be provided to rural children. They believe that social networking sites cover a wide range of information related to every topic,
such
as sports, politics, study, history, religion, and in
this
way children can learn their subjects by sitting at home
instead
of going to
schools
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school
. They think that these are
accessible source
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an accessible source
of information and one can easily get knowledge about a particular topic by searching
on
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for
social websites. In conclusion,
although
computers and
internet
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the internet
are useful for providing a variety of up-to-date knowledge to children, I firmly believe that without support from teachers and in the absence of schools, students will not achieve their targets in future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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