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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Career
 has become an important element of an individual's
life
. It is argued by many people, that
work
 takes a prime space in their
life
, and without a successful
career
 their
life
 would have no meaning. I partially agree with
this
 statement, and will justify the same in my essay.
To begin
 with, being successful in your
career
 always provides a great sense of achievement and satisfaction. The people in todays world have become very competitive and
work
 really hard to achieve their goals. When a person outperforms at
work
 he feels more satisfied and
also
 develops a proud feeling, whereas when a person fails at his task he feels, that his
life
 has no meaning left.
Hence
,
work
 achievement becomes a parameter for him to make his
life
 meaningful.
On the contrary
, being successful can
also
 result from being successful in personal
life
.
This
 means an individual should be happy and content in
life
,
this
 is
also
 a way which could add more meaning to his
life
. Just by having a great
career
 cannot make him content in
life
, if he continues to struggle in his personal
life
.
For example
, a top software engineer who was very successful in his
career
, committed suicide as he had a very disturbed married
life
, as he was not able to deal with the failure of his personal
life
. To conclude,
career
 is important and it does take a vital space in the
life
 of most people who thrive towards being successful, as it would add more meaning to their
life
.
However
, I would say people are more successful when they have a great balance between their personal and
work
life
, and are able to be content in both spheres of
life
.

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