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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming

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A countless number of factors causing
climate
change
 was introduced by the
first
world
 nations. In
this
 essay, I will discuss ways to minimize the risk of global warming. On one hand, afforestation which is the process of planting of trees,
this
 will increase and at the same time
balance amount
Suggestion
the balance amount
 of oxygen in the atmosphere. Industrialized nations
encourages
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encourage
 which has adverse effect by increasing flooding, soil erosion, loss of some
trees
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tree
 specie leading to
climate
change
. A law against
indiscriminate falling
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the indiscriminate falling
 of trees will control, protect and subdue risk of global warming On
other hand
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the other hand
, the use of alternative fuel for manufacturing industries would
also
 help reduce the problem of
climate
change
. Combustion of petroleum products produces smoke which goes to the sky, accumulates to form rain and falls back to the earth as acid rain.
Temperature
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The temperature
 in most regions of the
world
are
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is
 high
therefore
 making the habitat unsafe for mankind, aquatic life and plants. The United Nations should support the use of biofuels, solar and other sources while ensuring all member states are committed and adopts it. In conclusion, despite the fact that growth and development using science and technology by the
world
 power
has brought
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have brought
 global warming upon the
world
, I strongly believe that with the necessary commitment and support from every
nations
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nation
,
Accept space
,
by encouraging more trees planting while discouraging illegal falling of trees as well as the use of alternative fuel, we will be able to minimize the risk associated with
climate
change
.
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