Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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This
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essay will discuss the positive impact of
sport
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amentities
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
on public health as we as other factor which need to improve for the healthy and
prospeerous
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
life
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of
human being
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a human being
. To commence with,
sport
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facilities play a pivotal role to
provides
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provide
a healthy
life
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to humankind.
futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
furthermore
,
this
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types
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type
of
amenties
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
ailments
make
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makes
the people fresh and aid to get rid
from
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of
stressful
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a stressful life
life
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.
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for
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For
example, a recent research concluded that a person who
inolved
connected by participation or association or use
involved
in playing sports
such
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as football, volleyball and so on are
more healthier
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healthier
more healthy
than those who
dont
do not
don't
do any kind of
acitivies
advocating or engaged in activism
activist
.
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, there is no doubt that
its
the thing named or in question
it
makes humankind physically as well as mentally fit and fine.
Secondly
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, if the people are motivated to
indulged
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indulge
in
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sport
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a sport
they can active their mind and get refreshment by playing different types of games and
also
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became socialize to each other.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, the public
become
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becomes
more active and can get rid
from
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of
lazy
life
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with unhealthy
life
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.
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however
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However
, in my
opinion not
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opinion, not
only
sport
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facilities crucial for healthy
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life but
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life, but
also
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the healthy
food
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is
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
for public wellness.
Firstly
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,
package
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food
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use is increasing day by day due to the laziness and
careless of people
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careless people
.
its
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It's
It
Its
doesnt
does not
doesn't
mean
package
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food
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kill
you but
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you, but
if you take in regular
manner
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manner, then
then
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there is no doubt,
its
the thing named or in question
it
will kill you one day.
in
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In
these days, rather than making
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home made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
food
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people prefer to take
package
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food
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items more than
home
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made.
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hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
, they suffer from
disease
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a disease
which makes their
life
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devoid of being healthy.
For instance
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, a recent research concluded that
approximatley
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
approximately
90% people love to have
package
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food
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more than
home
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made so they are suffering from disease like obesity, high blood pressure and so on.
Hence
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,
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home made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
food
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should be given more priority than packaged
food
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. In conclusion,
sport
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facilities
should be improve
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should improve
should be improved
for making mankind healthy.
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however
Suggestion
However
, not only
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sport
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sports
nut
also
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other things like
home
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made
food
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should be improve for
imrovog
getting higher or more vigorous
improving
overall deveopment
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the overall development
overall development
of people.
Hence
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,
government
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the government
should give
important
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importance
to
sport
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as well as other things like
food
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for holistic development of people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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