Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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essay will discuss the positive impact of

sport

amentities

things that make you comfortable and at ease

amenities

on public health as we as other factor which need to improve for the healthy and

prospeerous

in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich

prosperous

life

human being

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a human being

. To commence with,

sport

facilities play a pivotal role to

provides

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provide

a healthy

life

to humankind.

futhermore

in addition

Furthermore

furthermore

this

types

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type

amenties

things that make you comfortable and at ease

amenities

ailments

make

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makes

the people fresh and aid to get rid

from

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stressful

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a stressful life

life

for

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For

example, a recent research concluded that a person who

inolved

connected by participation or association or use

involved

in playing sports

such

as football, volleyball and so on are

more healthier

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healthier

more healthy

than those who

dont

do not

don't

do any kind of

acitivies

advocating or engaged in activism

activist

Hence

, there is no doubt that

its

the thing named or in question

makes humankind physically as well as mentally fit and fine.

Secondly

, if the people are motivated to

indulged

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indulge

sport

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a sport

they can active their mind and get refreshment by playing different types of games and

also

became socialize to each other.

moreover

in addition

Moreover

, the public

become

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becomes

more active and can get rid

from

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lazy

life

with unhealthy

life

however

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However

, in my

opinion not

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opinion, not

only

sport

facilities crucial for healthy

life but

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life, but

also

the healthy

food

neccessary

absolutely essential

necessary

for public wellness.

Firstly

package

food

use is increasing day by day due to the laziness and

careless of people

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careless people

its

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It's

Its

doesnt

does not

doesn't

mean

package

food

kill

you but

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you, but

if you take in regular

manner

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manner, then

then

there is no doubt,

its

the thing named or in question

will kill you one day.

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these days, rather than making

home made

made or produced in the home or by yourself

homemade

food

people prefer to take

package

food

items more than

home

made.

hence

(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result

Hence

, they suffer from

disease

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a disease

which makes their

life

devoid of being healthy.

For instance

, a recent research concluded that

approximatley

(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct

approximately

90% people love to have

package

food

more than

home

made so they are suffering from disease like obesity, high blood pressure and so on.

Hence

home made

made or produced in the home or by yourself

homemade

food

should be given more priority than packaged

food

. In conclusion,

sport

facilities

should be improve

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should improve

should be improved

for making mankind healthy.

however

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However

, not only

sport

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sports

nut

also

other things like

home

made

food

should be improve for

imrovog

getting higher or more vigorous

improving

overall deveopment

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the overall development

overall development

of people.

Hence

government

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the government

should give

important

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importance

sport

as well as other things like

food

for holistic development of people.

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
sports facilities
physical activity
exercise
chronic diseases
heart disease
obesity
inclusivity
participation
safe environment
social interaction
community engagement
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health education programs
environmental factors
healthcare infrastructure
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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Your opinion

the government should give each citizen a basic income, so they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that to give opportunities to the new generation companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagre

Some people feel unsafe either staying at home or going out. What are the possible reasons for this? What can be done to address this issue?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?