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Nowadays some professionals such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries?

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It is irrefutable that some professions like doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. In the subsequent paragraphs, I shall discuss
this
 issue at length and
also
 suggest some other occupations, which deserve higher salaries.
To begin
 with, professions,
such
 as medical, engineering and law require far more years of study than what ordinary workers have to do.
For example
, for a basic M.B.B.S degree, more than 5 years of study is required, and after that to specialize in any specific field another three to five years are required. A person with a simple M.B.B.S degree does not earn all that high. Similar is the case with engineering and law professions. They have to undergo many years of struggle and training to
finally
 reach their telephone-figure salaries.
Secondly
, it requires a lot of financial input to attain these degrees. Many students have to take loans to study, which they have to repay later on. They may remain in debt for many years while they pay off their student loans.
Therefore
, their higher salaries are justified. Ordinary workers,
on the other hand
, do not have to spend huge amounts on their college and university fees. What is more, some of these professions are round the-clock professions very challenging physically as well as emotionally.
Finally
, it would not be wrong to say that not all
such
 professionals are highly paid. Many of them keep struggling throughout their lives.There are many other jobs which merit higher salaries. I believe that not only teachers, but
also
 nurses are doing commendable jobs in the society. They should be paid lucrative salaries so that people want to join these occupations.
Then
, there are people working in our defence services
such
 as the army, navy and air force. Because of them, we are led secure lives.
That is
 why they deserve higher pay-packages.
Furthermore
, people working in high risk professions
such
 as firefighters and security guards should be paid more and
finally
 people in administrative posts
such
 as IAS and IPS officers should have higher salaries. To sum up, there is no doubt that doctors, lawyers are receiving high salaries, but they rightly deserve them and many other professions are there which need to be paid more.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compensation
  • Expertise
  • Income disparity
  • Societal contribution
  • Automation
  • Scarcity
  • Market dynamics
  • Infrastructure
  • Professional ethics
  • Economic disparity
  • Undervalued
  • Meritocracy
  • Vocational skill
  • Job market
  • Wage gap
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