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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Give reasons.

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In today’s materialistic world,
money
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 plays an integral role in the
life
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 of the human beings. Everyone wishes to live a sophisticated
life
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 for which
money
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 is required.
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 the reason that some people opine that it is appropriate to marry for
money
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.
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, others are against the "Marry for
money
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" concept.
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 essay will discuss both the views before providing my verdict on
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 topic.
Marriage
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 is a ritual that provides a way for two unknown people to live their
life
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 together. Both the bride and bridegroom have
different set
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a different set
 of expectation from the
marriage
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. For few of them, love lays the foundation for a happy
marriage
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life
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. The partners learn to support and care for each other.
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 enables them to face any difficult situation in their
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.
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, sharing of responsibilities at home, provides ample time for the women at home, to concentrate on their career.
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, by progressing in their career they earn a good income for their family and lead a luxurious
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.
On the contrary
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, few other people expect their
life
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 partner to be financially stable at the time of the
marriage
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.
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, the
marriage
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 based on
money
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 may swiftly crumble due to the scarcity of
money
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.
In addition
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 to it, in
such
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 marriages, ladies become totally dependent on their husbands. In situations of financial crisis, they lack the confidence to face the world. But it cannot be said that
money
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 is not required for leading a happy
life
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. A family should have adequate income to manage their daily expenses. To conclude, I would like to state that a
marriage
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 deprived of either
money
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 or love may not be a successful one. Right share of
money
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 and love is
mandatory
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mandated
 to lead a happy and contented
life
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.

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