More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people prefer fast foods rather than home-made foods. In my opinion, the demerits of having a readily prepared food
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as questionable hygienic preparation and its long term effect on the health system of an individual outweighs any benefit it may bring. Admittedly, depending solely on ready- made foods can be
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saving.
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is because fast foods negates the need to spend hours in the process of preparing
home-made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
foods.
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, the
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conserved can be channeled into other productive activities of the day.
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, the lifestyle of an average resident of Lagos requires them to leave home early and return late
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fast foods have been the best bet for their survival. Another positive side of ready-made foods, is the variety it offers. There
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a wide variety of choices
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continental dishes to local dishes which can be gotten without stress.
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, a major drawback of ready-made foods is that the hygiene in terms of preparation can be questionable owing to the large volume of meals prepared per
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. Ultimately, it is difficult to ascertain the hygienic level of foods not self prepared.
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, the long term effect of fast foods results to various health challenges
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as obesity
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is due to the fact these
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foods, mostly
contain high fat contents which leads to the build up of cholesterol in the body.
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, ready-made foods contain
sweetners
something added to foods to make them taste sweeter
sweeteners
and various types of additives which can be
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(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
to the body system. In conclusion, while the major points of depending on readily prepared meals
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saving its numerous drawbacks
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overall effect on the health system cannot be underestimated.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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