Caring of children is an important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take training courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nourishment of children in a better way is very crucial in the society. It is considered that all parents must opt training courses of childcare.

However

, I do not agree with

this

statement, and I believe that

instead

of taking training courses, both parents should

engage in

make

efforts for better nourishment of their children at home.

To begin

with, the main reason to support my view is that nowadays, both parents have

became

Suggestion

become

workaholic and they do not have enough free time. If they take training courses of childcare,

then

they feel more burdensome on their mind and

also

after coming from

job

Suggestion

a job

the job

, they have to go for training courses and

Suggestion

during

the whole day they will not get free time to spend with their children.

Consequently

, they will not

engage in

make

any effort to take care about their children.

Therefore

, I think parents should spend time with their children rather than Doing training courses.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

153 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

equip (verb): to provide with necessary tools or skills
cater (verb): to attend to someone's needs or requirements
development stages (noun): specific times during a child's growth when certain physical or psychological changes occur
nutrition (noun): the process of providing or receiving the food necessary for health and growth
foster (verb): to promote the growth or development of something
mandatory (adjective): required by law or rules
infringement (noun): the action of limiting or undermining something
practicality (noun): the quality or state of being practical or realistic
accessibility (noun): the quality of being easy to obtain or use

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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