1- Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both these points of view and your opinion

Generally people watch movies or play computer games for either
divertion
an activity that diverts or amuses or stimulates
diversion
or relaxation. But from the past few years we can see that the younger generation is getting more attracted to games or movies which include violence. Though
this
is a boon for the video game developing companies where they can launch more action games and increase their profits but it is a bane
for
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to
the society. In olden days children used to play more outdoor games and they are physically and mentally fit but these days the children are addicted to video games and televisions which makes them
lathergic
deficient in alertness or activity
lethargic
and these days computer games and films are designing games which
encourages
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encourage
violence which
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
creates
negative psychological effect
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a negative psychological effect
the people and
also
very
dsadavantageous
to the society
.
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.
These games encourage activities
such
as murders
,
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,
smuggling
,
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,
robbery etc. According to those games doing
such
activities makes the protagonist hero
.
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.
but
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But
if they try that in real
life it
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life, it
is very harmful the
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is very harmful to the
society. Well to think about the positive points in these films and games
are
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is
that people can know the names of different weapons
,
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,
their uses
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
Other than
this
there is nothing positive about them. They
cant
can not
can't
be considered as a source of relaxation. To recapitulate, According to my opinion the negative effect
over weights
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweights
the positive
effect so
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effect, so
such
games and movies must be banned. And movies which encourage humanity must be designed.
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