IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

What difficulties will face your country in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

#difficulties #face #country #ten #years
As my country India is a developing one, so there are numerous problems need to overcome in order to stand
besides
 the developed countries. Particularly, in the fields
such
 as Information Technology, Agriculture and Pollution, there have been a lot of threats to be faced for
next
 ten years.
This
 essay will look at these problems and propose some solutions.
To begin
 with, there must be tremendous growth in the Information technology sector, which contributes a major share to the national GDP for a developing nation. But the problem here is the security of our systems because hacking makes our systems and websites vulnerable. The solution for
this
 issue is governments should build a strong firewall systems to safeguard the data and government websites. Another problem is that, as we belongs to the globalized village, most of the youth are not interested towards the agriculture. In my personal opinion, these people thought that it is not a lucrative business. To tackle
this
 issue governments must support the farmers by teaching them with modern technology used to increase their yields which
finally
 results in more income
similarly
 like software employees. The
third
 problem is the increasing rate of air pollution due to the construction of more and more power plants to meet the required demand load. Of course power is a major requirement for any developing country and it is
also
 one of the main factors of national GDP. But the flue gases and waste materials coming out of the power plants may pollute the earth's atmosphere by increasing the level of carbon monoxide. The only solution to
this
 issue is by increasing plantation. Everyone must involve in
this
 activity of the plantation. To sum up, one should stand as a developed country, all the above said challenges must be overcome. My view is that the main responsibility lies in the hands of governments to enlighten all the citizens towards the success over the challenges to become a developed nation.
Submitted by satya46 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: