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There is information about water use worldwide adn water consumption in two different countries. Summerise the informations.

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The two
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cats
gives
Suggestion
are given
 information about the area of using
water
 (1900 to 2000) and how much
water
 used in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. Overall, there was a sharp increase of in using
water
 in agriculture, industrial use. Even though Brazil has a large land and crowded population rather than
Democratic Republic
Suggestion
the Democratic Republic
 of Congo, their
water
 consumption is less than other another country. Using
water
 for industry and local use peaked after 1950 and dramatically went up in the
next
 years. There was not a big increase for of
domestical
of concern to or concerning the internal affairs of a nation
domestic
 use. It
also
 raised
after
Suggestion
over
 1950 and its probably because of population growth. According to table chart, Brazil had a big population, 176 million. Their irrigated land is 26.500km2. Democratic Republic of Congo is a very small
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
. Its land area only 100km2. People in Congo spent more
water
 for their
needs even
Accept comma addition
needs, even
 if their
water
 consumption was given only 8m3 by the chart.
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