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Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The journey from hunting for food to having meals on click of a button is evolutionary, party to
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 made preservatives as an ingredient of our daily consumptions.
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 might be beneficial in some cases where the place is suffering from natural calamities or is
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 believe that these artificial ingredients have been detrimental to the health of many people and is slowing poisoning the population. These additives make perishable food sustain a longer shelf life,
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, now we get toned milk, which can be used up-to 90 days compared to the fresh milk which has to be consumed in one day.
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 properties have made them admirable for places with extreme climates.
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, these meals are found very useful in the places where environmental disasters have taken place, we have witnessed many rescue teams distribute items which are mostly preservable. These are beneficial for soldiers in war like situations, these items give them energy to sustain a difficult condition.
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, the chemical infused meals supplement the wholesome eating and allows people to survive the extreme situations.
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, these supplements are deteriorating the human life. Many people are diagnosed with cancer and other critical illness because of these artificial chemicals in our daily meals. Certain items
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 as packed fruit juice or flavoured milk are filled with sugar are very harmful for children at a young age, in a recent survey, it resulted that many young people are having type 2 diabetes and it was not inherent.
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, these non perishable items are
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 responsible for obesity and eating disorder.
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, these processed foods have many negatives than positives. In conclusion, many ready-made foods contain preservatives and harmful chemicals which can be resourceful in helping countries affect with disasters whereas daily consumption of these packed meals is damaging the generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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