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Some people think that secondary or high school student should be taught how to use money management as a it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Financial
management
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 should taught by everyone for the better stability of life. In
this
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 essay, I can explain the viewpoints of learning the importance of
money
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management
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 in
school
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 days. I strongly agree to
this
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 statement, because the children can develop their skills in managing the
money
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 on their childhood onwards.
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Firstly in
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Firstly, in
 the
school
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 life, we
are only taught
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only teach
 about the subjects like mathematics, science, languages etc. We are not assisted to give any importance to the financial
management
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 in our
school
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 life. I believe that it is very essential to study about how to save and spend
money
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 in
proper way
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a proper way
, because children do not know the effort of earning
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.
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this
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 will lead to children spend more
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in
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on
 entertainment and fun activities
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 as usage of drugs, cigarettes, gambling etc.
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, I prefer to practice the students to save the
money
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 from their
school
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 days.
For instance
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, in my
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school I
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school, I
 had a recurring account for saving a fixed
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 by monthly, which increased my saving mentality.
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, these Kind of activities will develop the financial secured mentality in the future generation.
Furthermore
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, saving
money
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 for donating to educate the poor people and charity purpose could make a difference in youngsters.
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, it can mould our
next
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 generation into a financial managed society
.
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.
 In conclusion, In my opinion learning to spend
money
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 wisely is important for everyone. Because
money
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 is a limited resource which people should learn to use more efficiently. So the secondary or high
school
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 students should be given the knowledge of financial
management
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.
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