7. You're working overseas in an international company. You are leaving the country in emergency. Write a letter to your friends explaining the situation. In the letter, you should - apologise for leaving like this - explain what happened - tell them what you're going to miss about working with them
Dear Peter,
It'd been a
year
since we worked together. Time flies when you're having fun, right? Unfortunately, I had to leave the country yesterday in an emergency situation.
I would like to express my sincere apologies for such
an abrupt departure, considering my visa is about to expire as well
as
the term of my labour contract is about to Correct word choice
and
be ended
by the end of Wrong verb form
end
this
month.
As you already know, I had a limited work permit paper and I came to Australia last
year
looking for a new opportunity in my career path. I was very lucky to be accepted by your company and last
year
taught me a lot about engineering and the international environment. On the last
month of the contract, the company had offered me an extension of the contract, however
, I'd make up my mind as I'd been away from home for too long. This
decision will help me reunite with my family as well as
open up new opportunities for me in the future.
I am truly cherish
all the moments when we worked together, Change the verb form
truly cherish
as well as
all experiences
and knowledge Correct article usage
the experiences
you'd been
shared with me over the Wrong verb form
you've
last
year
. In the end, I learnt a lot from your company as well as
the culture of the people in Australia.
I hope that we can still stay in touch and hope our future paths will cross again.
Best wishes,
BenSubmitted by xbinh91 on
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coherence cohesion
There are minor grammatical and stylistic errors which can be improved for clearer communication.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs more clearly to ensure each one represents a single idea.
task achievement
You have addressed all aspects of the task effectively.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate and polite for the situation.
coherence cohesion
You used a good greeting and closing to frame your letter professionally.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite