Experts say older people were happier and healthier in past because they did exercise and spent more time with their family and friends , whereas many now suffer from lonliness and health problems . What are the causes of this and reasons

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health problems

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does not only make

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has not only made

is not only making

them unhappier but

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compel them to live in unhealthy lifestyle

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the one hand

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there are several reasons behind

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Firstly

, these days all works are dependent on

techincal

of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill

technical

gadgets

such

as phones

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computers,

liptops

a portable computer small enough to use in your lap

laptops

and many more

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Most of individuals are more friendly with

such

kinds of tools for many purposes as work from home

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study, and entertainment because people support that technology is more

sufficent

of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant

sufficient

significant

for them as compared to their grandparents

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As a

result many

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result, many

physical and mental

illness

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illnesses

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life, but

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in past

time

most of families doing exercise and played

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games as well as

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At night

time

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dinner was eaten by them at

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humankinds treat technical machines as family

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other hand, there are various

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solutions

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this

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and foremost solution is that children should teach their old parents

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the use of machines so in the free

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they are not felt

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people need to utilize every

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their older people It is not only makes their mind fresh but

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older

individuals to keep fit body

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if government open free training classes regarding to teach the use technical gadgets

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yoga and so many others which encourage them

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to maintain

their body healthy

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older humans have

great opportunity

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a great opportunity

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although

humans are busy

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with

work yet the health of older masses is more essential because society

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needs

old people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
49Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
technological reliance
urbanization
work-life balance
family dynamics
lengthy longevity
quality of life
social isolation
digital divide
cultural values
communal living
processed foods
dietary changes
mental health
elderly well-being

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Experts say older people were happier and healthier in past because they did exercise and spent more time with their family and friends , whereas many now suffer from lonliness and health problems . What are the causes of this and reasons

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all the shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree ? Huyền

You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -explain why you are selling -describe the furniture -suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture