Experts say older people were happier and healthier in past because they did exercise and spent more time with their family and friends , whereas many now suffer from lonliness and health problems . What are the causes of this and reasons

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is a sophisticated technology
which makes people more busy
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a direct impact
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experts, most
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health problems
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indifference by personal withdrawal
aloofness
as used to in the past
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does not only make
is not only made
has not only made
is not only making
them unhappier but
also
compel them to live in unhealthy lifestyle
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, these days all works are dependent on
techincal
of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill
technical
gadgets
such
as phones
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computers,
liptops
a portable computer small enough to use in your lap
laptops
and many more
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Most of individuals are more friendly with
such
kinds of tools for many purposes as work from home
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study, and entertainment because people support that technology is more
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
significant
for them as compared to their grandparents
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result, many
physical and mental
illness
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illnesses
are faced by them owing to
this
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life, but
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in past
time
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games as well in
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games as well as
free
time
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time
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dinner was eaten by them at
same place but
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the same place, but
the same place but
now
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humankinds treat technical machines as family
mambers
one of the persons who compose a social group (especially individuals who have joined and participate in a group organization)
members
member
so in
such
types of situations they have to face
serious problem
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serious problems
a serious problem
the serious problem
of loneliness because they are not able to use technical gadgets. On
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other hand, there are various
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solutions
to solve
this
major problem.
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and foremost solution is that children should teach their old parents
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the use of machines so in the free
time
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bored
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people need to utilize every
sunday
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Sunday
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the whole family, including
the whole family including
their older people It is not only makes their mind fresh but
also
help
old
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older
individuals to keep fit body
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if government open free training classes regarding to teach the use technical gadgets
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yoga and so many others which encourage them
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to maintain
their body healthy
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time
older humans have
great opportunity
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a great opportunity
to meet different people
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work yet the health of older masses is more essential because society
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old people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • technological reliance
  • urbanization
  • work-life balance
  • family dynamics
  • lengthy longevity
  • quality of life
  • social isolation
  • digital divide
  • cultural values
  • communal living
  • processed foods
  • dietary changes
  • mental health
  • elderly well-being
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