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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many governments are concerned about the growing young adults. In some countries the
population
 of young generation is larger than the elderly people. In
this
 regards the following essay describes the pros and cons of
this
 issue, while I believe that the benefits outweigh the negative points.
First
, it may be argued that young
population
growth
 means that a country with a higher
population
growth
 rate can achieve more and cheaper production of goods and services by efficient use of resources. As
such
, high
population
growth
 positively impacts supply and demand. But
this
 theory can only become a reality if job opportunities move along with
population
growth
 and
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 force
growth
, and people have the ability to access education and earn skills to enter the job market.
On the other hand
, life satisfaction increases with
age
,
in other words
 “life gets better as we
age
.” Increasing one’s intellect, knowledge and experience along with more leisure time due to child-rearing and retirement, can be attributed to the raising components of life satisfaction in middle
age
 and old
age
.
In addition
, societies with middle-aged
population
 are more likely to comply with the laws, as elderly people are less interested in committing crimes against property and other people. Overall, young
population
growth
 seems to have negative consequences regardless of a country’s existing infrastructure,
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market potential and quality of education. I would say that life satisfaction and reduction in crime are the influential component of society.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
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  • healthcare
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