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In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules.

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It is an irrefutable fact that different countries have different rules of children's behaviour. In some countries like The USA, Canada, and India have stringent rules of children's attitude. In some nations
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 as Uganda, Bolivia and Namibia, children are allowed to do whatever they want. In the subsequent paragraphs I shall discuss the advantages and serious drawbacks of having harsh rules on the children.
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, tough rules imposed by parents on their descendents make them responsible and respectable in the society. Some children may not listen to their parents.
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 particularly happens in the families who are having one and only one
child
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 because of their unconditional love of their
child
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. In that scenario parents must establish tough rules to make their
child
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's attitude proper.
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, if children do not follow rules, they may get out of the parents and work-shy. For suppose if they get out of the parents
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 definitely spoil their career and may become a burden to the society. If they become work-shy they cannot survive in the competitive world.
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, Imposing harsh rules on children does not always yield on positive behaviour.
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, teenagers always want to be a free bird and want to do everything by their own. By imposing tight rules, they become them more rigid. So they should be properly guided in a way to build their character. Imposing strict rules may destroy the individuality of the
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.
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, at the end of the day, children should
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 have their rights to exercise their free will and build their own pattern of behaviours.
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