In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country others think that government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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The debate on how much wages people should get has been left undecided. It is often considered by some that a minute population of diverse nations
receive
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receives
outrageous wages which is thought to be okay for the nation.
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, some people feel that the government of a
country
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should set a benchmark and not permit salaries beyond a particular level. In my own opinion, I believe that setting a
limit
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to
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of
salaries is beneficial to the
country
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as it will help control the economy. One the one hand, some people consider outrageous salaries earned by certain number of people as a good measure.
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, people who hold vital positions in the
country
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deserve
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and
thus
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should be given greater preferences.
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is because they carry the major responsibilities of the
country
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. In
Nigeria
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Nigeria, for
for example
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,
politicians particularly
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politicians, particularly
the senators are heavily paid owing to the fact that they are seen as the face of the
country
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as well as decision makers
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it is imperative to earn
such
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huge amount.
On the other hand
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, some other people feel the need for the government to set a
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to
wages
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the wages
which I agree.
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is due to the fact that some people earn salaries that are not justified for
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a
limit
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to how much an individual can earn will curtail unnecessary spending on the
country
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’s budget.
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, the economy of the
country
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can be put at greater risk which may lead to recession since the resources that ought to be channelled to improving the life of the nation as a whole is being consummated by some individuals.
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, a lot of discrimination exists where there is a huge difference in salaries earned by different individuals since it’s usually a case of the high class against the middle and
low
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lower
class. In conclusion, while people may have varying opinions, I believe there should be
justification
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a justification
for salaries earned and if a
limit
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is not put in place, it may cost the
country
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to incur unnecessary spending’s that may erode into the
country
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’s budget which
as a result
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have
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
on the economy.
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