Human society has made great technological progress in the last hundred years. Some people think this also has negative effects on our life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most people will agree that the improvement of people’s living standard owes to technological advancement.
However
, there are some people who argue that
this
development has
also
brought about unwanted problems that affect human
life
negatively. I partially agree with
this
opinion because the positive effects of technological development far outweigh its drawbacks. It is true that there are a couple of problems generated from hi-tech.
First
of all, smart devices make people lazy because
such
machines limit a user’s physical
activities
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activity
. Since those
devices
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device
process
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processes
works
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work
for owners and
thus
users rely too much on those, people are less likely to get up and move around, which could cause health concerns
such
as
obese
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obesity
or diabetes.
In addition
, automation systems and robots have replaced work forces. Since machines are
much
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many
productive
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more productive
than people when it comes to processing simple and repetitive works, labour
forces
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force
in many industries have been replaced with them, leaving huge increase in unemployment rates.
Nevertheless
, there is no doubt that technological progress has amazingly enhanced the quality of human
life
.
First
of all, electronic household devices have enabled individuals to save their hefty amount of time and effort on doing hard and tedious household tasks, as
such
intelligent devices clean the houses, wash dishes and wash clothes for owners.
In addition
, smart machines have significantly enhanced the productivity in
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
as well as enable people to carry out
dangerous but
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dangerous, but
helpful for human progress tasks
such
as space exploration. Working in the harsh environment could pose a threat to a worker’s
life but
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life, but
robots allow people to achieve those tasks without any casualties.  In conclusion,
although
peripheral effects are fabricated from the advancement of technology, it has brought about more advantages on human
life

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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