The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph illustrates the amount of
carbon
dioxide
emitted
from
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a person in four different countries, the United
Kingdom
,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007 in metric
tonnes
.
Overall
, the
emission
of
carbon
dioxide
in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
and
Sweden
experienced a downward trend,
whereas
Italy and Portugal experienced an upward trend.
However
, the people in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
and Italy emitted the highest
tonnes
of
carbon
dioxide
,
while
the smallest
emission
is from
Sweden
and Portugal. The average amount of
carbon
dioxide
emitted per person in
United
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Kingdom
was approximately 11 metric
tonnes
and
this
started to decrease, and by 1987 it has reached
to
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10 metric
tonnes
.
However
, the fall in the
emission
continued and by 2007 it has reached
to
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around 9 metric
tonnes
.
On the other hand
, in
Sweden
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,Sweden
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the
emission
of
carbon
dioxide
started
with
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almost 8.5 metric
tonnes
and it has sharply increased to about 10.2 metric
tonnes
in 1977.
However
, in the
next
10
years
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there was a rapid drop and
this
decrease continued till 2007 reaching about 5.8 metric
tonnes
.
Whereas
, Italy and Portugal started with around 4.1 and 1.7 metric
tonnes
in 1967, which started to increase moderately and by 2007 the amount of
carbon
dioxide
emitted was nearly 7.9 and 5.8 metric
tonnes
respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, kingdom, sweden, tonnes, emission with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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