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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted
from
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by
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 a person in four different countries, the United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007 in metric
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the
emission
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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 experienced a downward trend,
whereas
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 Italy and Portugal experienced an upward trend.
However
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, the people in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and Italy emitted the highest
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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,
while
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 the smallest
emission
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 is from
Sweden
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 and Portugal. The average amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted per person in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 was approximately 11 metric
tonnes
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 and
this
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 started to decrease, and by 1987 it has reached
to
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10 metric
tonnes
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.
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, the fall in the
emission
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 continued and by 2007 it has reached
to
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apply
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around 9 metric
tonnes
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.
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, in
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Sweden
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,Sweden
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 the
emission
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 started
with
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at
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 almost 8.5 metric
tonnes
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 and it has sharply increased to about 10.2 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977.
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, in the
next
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 10
years
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 there was a rapid drop and
this
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 decrease continued till 2007 reaching about 5.8 metric
tonnes
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.
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, Italy and Portugal started with around 4.1 and 1.7 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967, which started to increase moderately and by 2007 the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted was nearly 7.9 and 5.8 metric
tonnes
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 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, kingdom, sweden, tonnes, emission with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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