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some parents think it is good to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #children #phones
Over the
last
 few years, Technology has developed very rapidly. While some parents think it is good to give their children mobile phones and others argue that
this
 may
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 their children's life. In
this
 essay I will discuss some of the benefits associated with, Children using the mobile phones.
However
, it is important to consider the drawbacks too. Mobile phones may
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the children's health.
This
 is because, The emission of radiations from the mobile phones has a huge impact in damaging the eyes. In recent studies, Scientists mentioned that these radiations may cause many
helath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 problems in children, if they
use
 for a long time continuously. To avoid
this
, parents should not allow their children to
use
 mobile phone for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
.
As a result
, Radiations would not harm children.
Secondly
, I would like to discuss about the benefits of using mobile phones. It helps children in improving their skills.
For Example
, In my apartments I saw a boy who learnt French language by following video lectures
in
Suggestion
on
youtube
Suggestion
YouTube
. There are many children in all around the world, Who got benefitted in their life from using the mobile phones in a proper way. To sum up,
Although
 there are disadvantages,
such
 as damage to
eyes
Suggestion
the eyes
. There are
also
 benefits to consider, Which helps the children to learn. Personally, I believe that children can
use
 the mobile phones only under the guidance of parents, and
also
 parents should not allow their children to
use
 mobile phones
continuosly
at every point
continuously
 for a long time.
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