Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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wear
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read
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play
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watch and so on.
others
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Others
say
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parents should not
priority on
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priority, on
Children's desire because if they always follow children’s choices one day they will become selfish.In my opinion
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Accept space
,
parents should focus on children's choices so that they can think of themselves as independent. But parents need to keep balance. It is important for children to make their own choices.
in
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In
this
Linking Words
way they will be Self-reliant and independent.
if
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If
a
children
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child
can decide his
choices it
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choices, it
is
prove
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proven
proved
that he has an extra skill
on
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at
in
taking decision fast.
Moreover
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,
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,
a
child
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who knows what he
wants he
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wants, he
is more likely to be successful.
On the other hand
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,
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,
always letting children
to make
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make
their choices on their
own it
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own, it
is increased chances of becoming selfish.
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for
Suggestion
For
example
,
Accept space
,
my cousin
,
Accept space
,
she is 6 years old
,
Accept space
,
she
always like
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always likes
to watch
cartoon
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cartoons
.
she
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She
does not think whether
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
family members like or not.If
she
of a female
her
growing up with
this
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trend
,
Accept space
,
it will definitely impact on his career.
Furthermore
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,
Accept space
,
if a
child
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always demand
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always demands
high too expensive things when
this
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child
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will be adults she or he
can not
can not
cannot
change his/her habit. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
although
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it is vital to give a chance to children to make their choices regarding their future but it should be balanced.
Linking Words
Also parents
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Also, parents
should ensure that children are being to learn to respect others choice. (265 words)

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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