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Crime

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is a big problem all over the world and there are many different opinions on the best way to reduce

crime

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. The traditional solution is to punish the criminals by putting them in prison. It has been seen that when criminals are set free from prison,

majority

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the majority

of them

re-offend

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. In the following paragraphs, I shall suggest some causes of

this

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phenomenon and suggest some solutions.

To begin

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with, in traditional prisons, people learn a lot about

crime

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and so when they leave prison they tend to commit even more

crime

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In other

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words prisons

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words, prisons

act as universities of

crime

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Secondly

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, after being set

free some may

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free, some may

even want to lead a good and peaceful life, but

people

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the people

of the

community

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do not accept them and

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they don’t get any jobs. They are forced to

re-offend

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because they have to fulfil their basic needs.

Finally

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, some may commit

crime

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again because they do not have the training or qualification to do any job. Many steps can be taken to minimize the gravity of the situation.

First

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of all, petty offenders like

shop-lifters

a thief who steals goods that are in a store

shoplifters

and

pick-pockets

a thief who steals from the pockets or purses of others in public places

pickpockets

should be given some vocational training and education. It is a well not fact that the basic causes of

crime

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are poverty, illiteracy and unemployment. So, if we provide education and job

training

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training, then

then

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we would be removing the causes of

crime

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. If criminals are rehabilitated by some form of

employment

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employment, then

then

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they would certainly not

re-offend

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Furthermore

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community

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service

such

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as maintaining parks and doing some construction work can be taken from criminals

instead

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of just putting them into prisons. In

this

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way, they feel they are part of the

community

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and the

community

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also

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starts accepting them. To put it in a nutshell, I pen

down saying

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down, saying

that we should hate the

crime

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and not the criminal. To fight

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crime we

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crime, we

should focus on the causes of

crime

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. Education and job training help to rehabilitate the criminals. So, the focus should be on reforming the criminals so that they do not

re-offend

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

342 words

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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many today feel that attention spans are becoming shorter due to the prevalence of social media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more people in developed countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problem dose this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?

In order to reduce crime, we need to attack the causes of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities. It is enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people into prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people choose natural healing methods, such as acupuncture and massage therapy to recover from illness. Others prefer to use pharmaceutical drugs prescribe by their doctor for their aliments.