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Crime

is a big problem all over the world and there are many different opinions on the best way to reduce

crime

. The traditional solution is to punish the criminals by putting them in prison. It has been seen that when criminals are set free from prison,

majority

Suggestion

the majority

of them

re-offend

. In the following paragraphs, I shall suggest some causes of

this

phenomenon and suggest some solutions.

To begin

with, in traditional prisons, people learn a lot about

crime

and so when they leave prison they tend to commit even more

crime

In other

words prisons

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words, prisons

act as universities of

crime

Secondly

, after being set

free some may

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free, some may

even want to lead a good and peaceful life, but

people

Suggestion

the people

of the

community

do not accept them and

as a result

they don’t get any jobs. They are forced to

re-offend

because they have to fulfil their basic needs.

Finally

, some may commit

crime

again because they do not have the training or qualification to do any job. Many steps can be taken to minimize the gravity of the situation.

First

of all, petty offenders like

shop-lifters

a thief who steals goods that are in a store

shoplifters

and

pick-pockets

a thief who steals from the pockets or purses of others in public places

pickpockets

should be given some vocational training and education. It is a well not fact that the basic causes of

crime

are poverty, illiteracy and unemployment. So, if we provide education and job

training

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training, then

then

we would be removing the causes of

crime

. If criminals are rehabilitated by some form of

employment

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employment, then

then

they would certainly not

re-offend

Furthermore

community

service

such

as maintaining parks and doing some construction work can be taken from criminals

instead

of just putting them into prisons. In

this

way, they feel they are part of the

community

and the

community

also

starts accepting them. To put it in a nutshell, I pen

down saying

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down, saying

that we should hate the

crime

and not the criminal. To fight

crime we

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crime, we

should focus on the causes of

crime

. Education and job training help to rehabilitate the criminals. So, the focus should be on reforming the criminals so that they do not

re-offend

Sun Nov 24 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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12Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

342 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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