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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time

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Most of the people have to choose two selections reluctantly in our world.The
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 of these choices is having more
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 is earning less
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 and less free
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 is good while the others think of the reverse. The
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 and less free
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 "is more reasonable than the
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 for some people.They believe that they can have a good
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 with having more
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.And people think rightly life may be more stress-free if they they have a huge amount of cash to buy anything they want or just simply spend on normal things
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 and more leisure
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more free
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 for themselves than spending
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 to earning
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-life and satisfaction index and
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 they came to conclude that the people were so happy with enough
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 and they really do enjoy their relations and family
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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