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A staggering amount of food is wasted every year, both in businesses and household. Why is this happening? What can be done to tackle this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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People have different opinions on the yearly
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waste
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, In
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 essay, I will discuss the causes of
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problem
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 first and
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 offer some possible solutions to it. In my view, the primary cause of
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problem
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 is the incorrect estimation of demand.
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,
restaurants
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 often overstock
food
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 because they overestimate the number of customers or overbuy
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 to avoid shortages.
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 is not entirely the
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' fault, there are many factors that can lead to changes in customer numbers.
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 these miscalculations,
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 often expires and needs to be thrown away. In terms of households, parents are always attracted to discounted products, because they can reduce the cost of living, but these items often have a drawback: they will expire soon. If the family cannot eat the
food
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 within the limited time, that becomes a
waste
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 too. In order to overcome
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problem
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,
restaurants
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 could partner with companies which are experts in customer number estimation.
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 could help
restaurants
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 prepare the right amount of
food
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. It would not only benefit in reducing
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waste
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 but
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 in decreasing costs.
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, excess
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 could be donated to institutions
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 as orphanages or homeless shelters, which could help children and homeless people a lot,
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 at the same time avoiding
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waste
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. As for households, parents should focus more on expiration dates than discount campaigns, buying only the amount that the family needs. In conclusion,
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 it is improbable that any solution will be found in the near future. I feel that the abovementioned measures would be a good first step.

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language
Include a more varied range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and enhance the quality of your language.
ideas and content
Consider including more distinct examples, particularly real-world instances, to illustrate your points further.
structure
The essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph has a distinct purpose and contributes to the overall argument.
logic
You've effectively articulated the causes of food waste before suggesting solutions, demonstrating a logical progression of ideas.
task response
The solutions proposed are practical and directly related to the causes you identified, showing a clear understanding of the task.
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