The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.
The chart compares the expenditure on three fast food items consumed on weekly basis in
United
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Kingdom, among three
income
classes. (21)
Overall
, the money spent on
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a hamburger
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hamburger
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is the highest for both high and
average
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average-income
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income
groups,
while
low
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low-income
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income
class
spent more money on purchasing
fish
and
chips
. In comparison, the spending of
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the high
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high
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high-income
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income
class
is the highest for
Hamburger
at 45
pence
.
This
figure went down dramatically to 16 and 19
pence
for
fish
or
chips
and pizza respectively. The average
income
people
also
spent the highest amount on
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a hamburger
the hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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, about 33
pence
. Their spending decreased to 25
pence
for
fish
or
chips
but becomes exactly half than
fish
for pizza.
Finally
, the purchasing of
low
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low-income
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income
class
is the highest for
fish
or
chips
and
hamburger
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hamburgers
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at about 14 and 17
pence
respectively.
However
, their spending on pizza is much less, just over 5
pence
. (128)
Thus
, the spending of
British
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on fast food items fluctuated in all the
income
groups but remained the lowest for
low
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low-income
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income
class
. (23)
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