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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.
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The chart compares the expenditure on three fast food items consumed on weekly basis in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, among three
income
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 classes. (21)
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, the money spent on
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a hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 is the highest for both high and
average
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average-income
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income
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 groups,
while
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low
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low-income
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income
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class
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 spent more money on purchasing
fish
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 and
chips
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. In comparison, the spending of
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the high
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high
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high-income
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income
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class
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 is the highest for
Hamburger
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 at 45
pence
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.
This
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 figure went down dramatically to 16 and 19
pence
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 for
fish
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 or
chips
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 and pizza respectively. The average
income
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 people
also
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 spent the highest amount on
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a hamburger
the hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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, about 33
pence
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. Their spending decreased to 25
pence
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 for
fish
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 or
chips
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 but becomes exactly half than
fish
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 for pizza.
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, the purchasing of
low
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low-income
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income
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class
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 is the highest for
fish
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 or
chips
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 and
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 at about 14 and 17
pence
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 respectively.
However
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, their spending on pizza is much less, just over 5
pence
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. (128)
Thus
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, the spending of
British
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the British
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 on fast food items fluctuated in all the
income
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 groups but remained the lowest for
low
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low-income
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income
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class
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. (23)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, hamburger, class, fish, chips, pence with synonyms.
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