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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult do you agree or disagree

#accessibility #university
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It is often to
said
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say
 that, in the modern world higher
education
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 on campus is more popular than before. Students who are in poor families or wealthy families have to face the same challenges to get
accessibility
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access
 to university.
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, students in rich families win that challenge rather than the poor. I disagree with about
topic
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the topic
a topic
 and my views are as follows. Nowadays,
education
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 can measure
money
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. The reason for that every learning institution takes lots of
money
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 to follow many courses of subjects.
For
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instance in
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instance, in
 Sri Lanka child cannot
enter the
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enter, the
 better schools without paying
money
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 donations.
As a result
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 of that, they could not have the best primary
education
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 as well. If a child has not better knowledge, he or she cannot win the challenge which is entered for the campus. For
moreover
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,
Child
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the child
the Child
 who
come
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comes
 from the poor background they do not have to use new technology.
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, poor students do not know even how to use a computer and gather knowledge via the internet.
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, students suffer about their poverty. They have to do some job
for
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of
satisfy
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satisfying
 their basic needs.
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 of that, they
do not have do spend
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don't spend
do not spend
have not spent
haven't spent
are not spending
aren't spending
 time and
money
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 on
education
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.
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, poor students have to face many difficulties than rich students to get into university,
Furthermore
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, poor learners not getting any chance to receive perfect infrastructure facilities as well. Because of that wealthy students can achieve successfully their goals. In conclusion,
i
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I
 disagree with that above scenario. In my view is the poor students should go through that
challenges
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challenge
 with strengthening the mind to receive accessibility into the university.

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