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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

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I agree with the given statement and think that living in a foreign country where you have to use a foreign language on a daily basis can result in some serious social issues and some practical problems. Language as an instrument of communication usually forms our outlook and the way of
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the world around us. That means that we usually use some symbols, idioms, images and figures of speech that are commonly known in our society. We have heard the same fairy tales, read the same books, watched the same movies and listened to the same music in our childhood and youth. We`ve learned the same history
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 our compatriots, following
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 common traditions and celebrating
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 holidays. That`s why we usually face many cultural differences with
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, when we start to live among
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foreigners, we can face mutual misunderstanding or incorrect perception of speech and ideas. We can be
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 as strange or weird
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our words, so our mates our colleagues can alienate us or stop trusting us, and that`s a social issue. The most significant problem of misunderstanding can occur if you do not follow
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 and laws of the country just because you don`t understand them
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 the low level of comprehension. Basically, you can just get the wrong item in shops or the wrong service in barbershops. The most terrifying outcome of misunderstanding can happen in
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 if you cannot correctly understand or answer
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 of a doctor.
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 we shouldn`t focus only on the negative consequences of living in a country, where
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 speak a foreign language. Living abroad is a good chance to understand another culture, obtain a new perception of the world and meet interesting
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. Local
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 in most countries would try their best to help you and would usually take into account that you are not a native speaker. Learning English is a great opportunity to feel comfortable in any state and is a key
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 understanding different cultures.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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