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People are of the opinion that children’s behavior should be controlled by their parents and teachers. Others do believe that children should be free to do as they like. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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The debate on whether children should have a total and final say on how they choose to behave or kept in check is a tricky one. While some think leaving them to do as they like is the best, others think
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. I totally believe that the way a
child
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 behave should be controlled by their parents and respective teachers.
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 will help a
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 make better decisions, especially in choosing a career. It will
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 to a large extent have a positive impact on the
society
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 as a whole.
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 and foremost, the most important decision in one's
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 is choosing a career path. It forms the basis of one's
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 in general.
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, a medical doctor will approach issues by diagnosing them. While an engineer might approach the same issue in a different way. Since parents have seen more of
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's history and Evolution of lifestyle, they are in a position to make better decisions for their kids because they can predict what best might suit their offerings in facing the challenges
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 ahead of them in
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. A guidance from someone knowledgeable in the chosen career is
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 important. Another reason why a young fellow should should not be allowed to behave as he/she seems okay is due to the effect it might have on the
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. A popular example can be seen from the western culture. Children are allowed full autonomy, which has led to increased crime rate. Because the
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 cannot afford another generation of unguided youths, their behaviour needs monitoring from the onset. In conclusion, I strongly believe control needs to be placed on the way a
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 behaves, as
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 will on the long run be better for the
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 and the
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 as a whole.
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