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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

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music
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 has
great impact
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a great impact
 on cultures and generation
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still there are people who have strong feelings on their argument.
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both sides will be discussed before drowning a reasonable conclusion
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 On the one hand
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some people's opinions that
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music
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 leads young people astray.
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listening to
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 too much that generates young people
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with
bad mood
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bad moods
a bad mood
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is create
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is creating
has created
creates
 health problems.As a result
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the nation lose their
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 generation.
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my cousin
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his name Arif
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he is a student.
whenever
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Whenever
 he listened to
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 for a long time it launches to headache and it is a big hamper of concentrating on studying.
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excessive listening to
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thats
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that's
make
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made
 hearing impairments.
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a good number of people who think it is more possible to change society cultures and generation.
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music
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the music
 does little to alleviate generational barriers, it does help cultures relate through universal, human perspectives.
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 to that
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music
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 is a part and parcel of our life.Nowadays
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people have been followed singers as their fashion whole model.
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my friend
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his
name sayem
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name, saying
name saying
name seems
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he is at university.
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 he was
a
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an
uncultural
not in accordance with or determined by nature; contrary to nature
unnatural
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 he now big fashion fan.
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listening to English
music
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 that can be a scope of learning foreign language for non native speakers.
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my nephew
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she used to
listening
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listen
 to English
music
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 now she is a good English speaker. To conclude
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it is quite understandable that people hold different interpretations on the same issue.
However
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in my point of view
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music
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 can bring a
variation
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variety
 in cultures and generations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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