Recent studies have shown that overweight people trend to eat junk food that are high in unhealthy fats. Some people argue that an increase in price of such foods will serve as a deterrent and thus reduce the number of overweight people. Do you agree and disagree?

In
this
modern and cut throat competitive world, people have altered themselves to work, round the clock.
This
new
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
has given rise to a number of health problems and amongst these obesity is considered to be the most fatal one.
This
is thought to be increasing due to consumption of fast
food
. So to hold the fist in
this
problem, rise in
price
is suggested. But I think,
this
is not the pragmatic solution due to a lot of reasons.
Firstly
, the people who are habitual of eating fast
food
will not change their taste because old habits die hard. A person who has accustomed himself to a particular eating habit will not be able to resist himself as his body will demand these.
Moreover
, daily
intakers
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
intakes
will not care about the
price
because their taste and satisfaction matter a lot.
This
can be easily justified by taking an example of fuel
price
in India. Today, a
liter
a metric unit of capacity, formerly defined as the volume of one kilogram of pure water under standard conditions; now equal to 1,000 cubic centimeters (or approximately 1.75 pints)
litre
of petrol costs about Rs 90 but
this
deep hole in pockets is not bothering people as driving their own private vehicle has become their
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and is considered no more a luxury but a need.
Further
, it is scientifically proven that obesity is not because of fast
food but
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food, but
can be caused by the genetic problems. As it is often observed that a kid of obese parents often
overweighs
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
otherwise
.
Finally
, these junk
foods
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food
restaurants are supporting millions of families because
this
industry has given work to myriad waiters, chefs and managers. Expensive
food
stuff will bring
darker era
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a darker era
in
this
industry and will make many jobless. At the tip of
iceberg
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the iceberg
, increase in
price
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the price
of any commodity of a man is not the right solution. Increased rates of junk
food
will not stop people from purchasing
these but
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these, but
can create a rage in them against government as for them, it may be a restriction on their freedom right. Authorities need to promote healthy lifestyle in order to make people fit and fine.
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