Recent studies have shown that overweight people trend to eat junk food that are high in unhealthy fats. Some people argue that an increase in price of such foods will serve as a deterrent and thus reduce the number of overweight people. Do you agree and disagree?

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modern and cut throat competitive world, people have altered themselves to work, round the clock.

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new

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

has given rise to a number of health problems and amongst these obesity is considered to be the most fatal one.

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is thought to be increasing due to consumption of fast

food

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problem, rise in

price

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is suggested. But I think,

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is not the pragmatic solution due to a lot of reasons.

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, the people who are habitual of eating fast

food

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will not change their taste because old habits die hard. A person who has accustomed himself to a particular eating habit will not be able to resist himself as his body will demand these.

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, daily

intakers

the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)

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will not care about the

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because their taste and satisfaction matter a lot.

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can be easily justified by taking an example of fuel

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in India. Today, a

liter

a metric unit of capacity, formerly defined as the volume of one kilogram of pure water under standard conditions; now equal to 1,000 cubic centimeters (or approximately 1.75 pints)

litre

of petrol costs about Rs 90 but

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deep hole in pockets is not bothering people as driving their own private vehicle has become their

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

and is considered no more a luxury but a need.

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, it is scientifically proven that obesity is not because of fast

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food but

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food, but

can be caused by the genetic problems. As it is often observed that a kid of obese parents often

overweighs

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

otherwise

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, these junk

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restaurants are supporting millions of families because

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industry has given work to myriad waiters, chefs and managers. Expensive

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stuff will bring

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a darker era

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industry and will make many jobless. At the tip of

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the iceberg

, increase in

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price

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the price

of any commodity of a man is not the right solution. Increased rates of junk

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will not stop people from purchasing

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these, but

can create a rage in them against government as for them, it may be a restriction on their freedom right. Authorities need to promote healthy lifestyle in order to make people fit and fine.

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