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Many doctors in several countries believe people are not getting regular exercise. What are the causes, what can be done about it?

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Over the
last
 few years, People have stopped exercising.
This
 is because they are not getting time to
work
 out. There are many people who believe that
exercise
 plays a significant role in everyone's life. In
this
 essay I will discuss about the causes of not getting regular
exercise
, and
also
 suggest some solutions for
this
 issue. One of the factors for not getting regular
exercise
 is due to lack of time.
This
 is because of working long hours at
work
 environment.
For Example
, In IT industry, usually Professionals
work
 from 9.00 am to 6.00 pm. They spend most of the day at the office, and they don't get time to
work
 out. To solve
this
, Industry experts should come forward and allot an hour for
exercise
.
This
 would help the employees' health in a long run. If they don't take
this
 step,
this
 may show an effect an employee's health. Some people are not aware of the benefits of doing
exercise
 regularly.
For Example
, People who live in village areas don't know about the importance of
exercise
. To solve
this
, government should take responsibility to bring awareness among public.
As a result
, people would start exercising, which improves their body resistance. In conclusion, Anyone can do
exercise
 irrespective of gender. Regular
Exercise
 improves the immunity power of the body, and
also
 boost up the confidence levels. Every Individual should take
this
 as their responsibility, and try to do
exercise
 regularly. The government
also
 should take a step to start some
exercise
 programs at
work
 place for their employees.
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