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Some think that teenagers should follow older people's rules. Others think that it is natural for them to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Various rules have been made by human beings for the smooth conduct of their lives. While some individuals believe that youngsters ought to be
follow
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following
 rules made by old people, I believe teenagers can argue
on
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about
with
 the rules of older people and it is quite obvious. On the one hand, it is true that
elderly
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the elderly
 have more life experiences and their rules are based on their judgments for the life. They have seen many ups and downs in their lives and mostly they are aware about the consequences of various acts.
For instance
, getting advice from a retired employee to do some difficult office
work
 might
beneficial
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benefit
beneficially
 for a teenager to mitigate a problem because
older worker
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an older worker
 has experience to deal with
such
 situations.
However
, one can
also
 invent one's own more efficient way to do the same task which might be less arduous than
the older
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the old
 method.
On the other hand
, it must be agreed that circumstances always change with the passage of time. Teenagers grow in the different conditions and facilities than the older ones. Involvement of technological devices in the field of education can easily justify
this
 point. In the bygone days people used to do their
work
 manually, but now mostly electronic gadgets get involved in the education system and even in the workplaces to do long duration
work
 in a small time. So, obviously youngsters can develop their own rules and can
work
 according to the available facilities and they can even do
work
 in a more optimal way. In conclusion,
although
 people have mixed views on the subject matter, in my opinion youngsters can challenge the guidelines which were made by older people because
rules
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the rules
 have always been made by humankind according to the circumstances of some specific time period.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditions
  • Elders
  • Authority
  • Innovative
  • Exploration
  • Adaptation
  • Critical thinking
  • Upholding values
  • Questioning norms
  • Independence
  • Dialogue
  • Informed decisions
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