These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree.

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Television
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channels now tend to
show
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violent content as to increase their channel ratings, which has led children to demonstrate immorality. I strongly agree with
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statement as children nowadays
show
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extremely aggressive behaviour by watching
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programs which is certainly an alarming situation.
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with, some people consider that the programs displaying aggressive content
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nothing to do with the behaviour of children. It is solely the duty of parents to teach etiquettes to their children.
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, parents must accompany their children when they watch
television
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and when any
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program is broadcasted parents must guide their children to differentiate between the right and wrong attitude.
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, it has been observed that children who watch
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under their parents' supervision are less likely to misbehave.
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, it is
thaught
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
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that it is the parental
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
that plays a vital role in
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the moral development
of children.
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, I think it is impossible for parents to keep an eye on their children and sit along with them every time. Programs on
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mostly
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fierce acts like conflicts and abusive languages that attract the children most and due to
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they have become too rude and violent.
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, even the cartoons and animated movies contain fighting scenes or consistent bullying and teasing the peers which children try to copy.
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, animated movies
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about
superheroes
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fighting and cartoons like
doremon
an evil supernatural being
daemon
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give an impression of fun by bullying others and it has been observed that children proudly imitate
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attitudes and do not hesitate to tease others. In conclusion, I firmly believe that increased aggression in children is a consequence of watching violent programs which are now the part of almost every
television
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channel.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • mimicking
  • aggressive
  • idolize
  • fear or anxiety
  • social interactions
  • mental health
  • proactive
  • supervision
  • content
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