It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

As
human being
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human beings
a human being
migrate
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migrates
from their own
mother land
the country where you were born
motherland
, it is believed that their adoptive skill and level of perceiving others will be comparatively high. I completely
fact because
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fact, because
when people move out they come out of their in-dependency and since they get along with people of various
culture
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cultures
, they become more understandable and cooperative.
Firstly
, when people shift from their native they become more dependent; in fact, they will not be aware of anything in the new environment.
This
will make them to communicate with the native people for all their basic needs, in that case they have to be less arrogant and more
coordinative
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coordinating
.
For example
, my classmate, who left India for higher studies became so patient and easy going.
Initially he
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Initially, he
was not like that and now I can easily feel
difference
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the difference
a difference
in his character. So exploring new places will definitely increase the acceptance of other's thoughts.
Moreover
, when we visit an unfamiliar place and learn new
culture
; eventually our perception
on
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of
common things will get in parallel with other's. In other worlds, when a person is placed in
newer region it
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the newer region, it
the newer region it
will help him to understand the life of people and their
culture
and tradition, which will definitely be projected in his character.
For instance
, when I went to Syria for medical camp, I understand the suffering of people in the country for food and medical supply, if I stayed in India I might not aware of
such
situations.
Therefore
, travelling new place and enduring people's life will
also
help in improving the understandability of their
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
problem and lifestyle. To recapitulate, as people make
journey
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journeys
out of their own country, they get equipped to be more tolerant and
understandable
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understanding
by becoming more communicative and dependent, and
also
by grasping others
culture
and mindset.
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