"Some people believe that adults get motivated to exercise and play sports because of the major sports events on TV such as the Olympic Games and Football World Cup. Others say that there are many ways apart from TV to encourage them to exercise. Discuss both views and give your own opinion."

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Sports events all over the world telecast on

television

, are g

reat source

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a great source

of entertainment. A good portion of people even believes that these events incite them to take part in physical exercise and sports. And there are many, who think apart from sports programs on

television

a lot of other ways motivate people to exercise as well. Personally, I support the latter o

ne but

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one, but

this

essay, I will try to elaborate on both the views. Grand sports events like World Cup Football or Olympic Games which are available to view on

television

sets, reach so many people that no other events can. Watching the fittest human beings on earth, all the regular people start dreaming to become an athlete like them. Despite knowing that it is not practically possible for them,

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ut many of them at least try.

Therefore

sportsmen encourage young adults to be fit like them. From h

air

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a hair

cut to f

itness,

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fit

following sports celebrities is very common in our culture. Another noteworthy point is, multi-sports events like Olympic or Asian Games, exhibits numerous ways and viewers get ideas which type of sports may suit them.

On the contrary

, most of the adults consider sports events as just a source of entertainment. Though a good number of followers are very serious about their f

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are limited

within tracking records or collecting merchandise at best. Rather, for exercise, health shows or fitness experts play g

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a greater role

to motivate them.

In addition

this

, unlike teenagers and children, adults are very aware of the facilities sportsmen get and the routine t

people in general

they

follow.

That is

why matured people do not even try to follow them. They get motivated from people around them, maybe a friend or a colleague with whom t

people in general

they

can r

elate themselves.

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relate to themselves

In conclusion, nowadays most of the modern educated adults are health conscious not because they are motivated by watching sports events on

television

rather they want to live a healthy life following an easy practical routine.

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