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Some parents think children's behavior should be strictly controlled, while other parents think children should be free to behave. Discuss both views and give examples.

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Childhood is the best period in a person's life. If it is being completely controlled by parents,
then
 it cannot be enjoyed joyfully. In my perspective, there should be a balanced approach which can be followed by parents. Through
this
 essay, I will discuss both the views.
For instance
, if a child is being controlled by any of the parents, it will have a huge impact on his adulthood as he would not be able to make decisions independently. He will always rely upon not only on his parents but
also
 on the other people in his life. The child might not have his own ambition and never be able to take risks, which in turn impact his professional growth.
Also
, since his behaviour was always being controlled by his parents, he might start lying to rebel against them.
Also
, there is a popular saying "Possessive parents, raise the best liars"
On the contrary
, if a youth is completely free to behave,
then
also
 it will have a negative impact.
For instance
, he might get into bad company because his parents never interfered in his life. He might end up hurting others. According to recent studies by Juvenile court, most of the convicted minors were either not staying with their parents or their behaviour was abusive because a lot of freedom was given to them during childhood. To conclude, I believe, proper control should be placed in the children's way of behaviour when it has to, and give them freedom to explore the world outside at the same time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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