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In past, museums stored information about culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through the internet. And therefore, there is no need to go into museums. Do you agree or disagree.

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In a bygone era, conservation of knowledge regarding the cultural and historical aspects has done by museums.
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, in the current situation,
information
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 can be accessed by various means utilizing
world wide
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the world wide web
web
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.
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, it is believed that there is no necessity to visit museums due to
same
a painful emotion resulting from an awareness of inadequacy or guilt
shame
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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 statement because
information
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 available on an
internet
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 does not guarantee its authenticity and some may feel inconvenience using
internet
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 for acquiring knowledge. Relying entirely on the
internet
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 to gather details on any cultural or historical topics is tad risky because it may provide misleading
information
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 through many
web
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 articles. Not all
information
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 available on the
internet
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 is scrutinized, so no one can assure about its credibility.
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, reading and acquiring incorrect data can mislead many people about culture and heritage, thereby leading into
false impression
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a false impression
 about the same.
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, an online security watchdog, recently alerted that 90% of published articles on
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web
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the web
 are without authentic sources and propagate incorrect
information
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. Another reason to consider is that some people may experience difficulties in browsing through digital
portals
a representation of a person or scene in the form of a print or transparent slide; recorded by a camera on light-sensitive material
photos
. Not all are techno-savvy, especially middle and old age generation.
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, enthusiast from
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 age group could not use
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web
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the web
 as their primary source for gathering knowledge;
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, they primarily depend on museums for their research and studies.
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, recent survey
reviled
make visible
revealed
 that only 35% of the population who are above 40 years is familiar with online technology. In conclusion, I disagree that museums are needed to make redundant due to ever growing presence
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on
 the
web
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. My opinion is mainly due to a risk of gathering incorrect data and difficulties in handling technology by some people.

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