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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome?

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World-
life
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balance
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 is a mandatory for every
employee
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. Most of the employees cannot achieve
work
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-
life
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balance
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 in their
life
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.
This
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 essay will
first
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 discuss about, how
work
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 load and lack of planning in the workplace affect the
work
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-
life
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balance
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.
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,
this
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 essay will explain how these problems can be avoided through a well organised
life
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. Allocating more tasks to an individual
employee
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 will affect their
work
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-
life
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balance
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. To go into detail, Every member of an organisation has some amount of
work
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 to do. Sometime, the efficient
employee
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 might have huge responsibilities in their shoulder just because they are doing all tasks very well.
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 of their efficiency, the manager keeps allocating plenty of tasks to them.
This
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 will affect their
balance
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 between workplace and family
life
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.
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, as per a survey of the Times of India newspaper, most of the recognised employees are staying late in their workplace due the their heavy load of
work
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. Another reason that
potentially affect
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potentially affects
 the equilibrium between
work
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 and family
life
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 of people is
lack
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the lack
 of planning. To go
in
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into
 detail, Most of the
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 are unaware of the importance of planning while doing their job. They might have allocated to multiple tasks and most of the tasks might be
repetative
repetitive and persistent
repetitive
.
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, the
employee
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 should figure out a way to do
repetative
repetitive and persistent
repetitive
 tasks. By doing
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,
there
of them or themselves
their
work
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 effort would be reduced and they can complete their
work
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 in a short span of time.
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, most of the daily jobs in MNC's are automated
by
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with
 high efficient scripts.
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 will reduce the
employee
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's effort to a great extend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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