A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Whereas there is a strong opinion that multicultural societies have some advantages upon
monocultural
ones and are developed faster, others consider
monoculturalism
the doctrine that several different cultures (rather than one national culture) can coexist peacefully and equitably in a single country
multiculturalism
and having a master culture is the only way
for
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of
keeping and developing a certain cultural heritage. I agree up to the point that in some way a society where one can observe different views on life or
events people
Accept comma addition
events, people
become more open-minded and
therefore
, they are not afraid of new discoveries and ways of thinking.
On the other hand
, the worst drawback of multiculturalism is a tension among different ethnic and religious group, which makes it impossible for the country to be developed. One of the results due to which a city or country is getting
prosperious
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
is a moving different cultural backgrounds people in because of the trading or war.
The good
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The best
example of it is Istambul which contains a mixture of
achitectual
of or pertaining to the art and science of architecture
architectural
heritage of the West and the East
owe
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owes
to Christian and Muslim invasions.
Besides
it, Istambul has always been the world market where
craftmen
a professional whose work is consistently of high quality
craftsmen
craftsman
from all over the world sold their goods.
Thus
,
this
city is known to be great and attractive for tourists nowadays as well, due to its multicultural past. In
contast
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
context
, the negative consequences of multiculturalism policy
are resulted
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result
in riots, strikes and erasing of local cultures. In some cases it can even lead to civil wars or conflicts.
For instance
, today's European
countries
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country's
politicians try to settle refugees from the East to increase local population. Despite of a high level of living standards European families seldom have more than one child, which leads to population
dicreasing
becoming less or smaller
decreasing
. According to the initial plan people of derived cultures, who had immigrated to Europe, should have been assimilated to locals and transformed their lifestyle to European one.
However
,
instead
of learning a new culture, these people started to spread their own, demanding others to live in accordance with their requirements.
Hence
, they ultimately faced with
agression
a disposition to behave aggressively
aggression
of
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by
locals, who did not like aliens. To sum up, a mixture of of cultures can be existed if only it has been forming for ages.
In other words
, people need time to get used to each other and work together building up efficient society.
Furthermore
, cities where a multiculturalism was a norm for centuries, have demonstrated its greatness and development till today.
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