In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people

There is no open place for

construction

of houses, whose

demand

is increasing rapidly, except

countryside

However

, some people argue that it should be protected. In my opinion, I disagree with them and provide reason for building homes in

outskirts

Suggestion

the outskirts

First

and foremost, cities have become over crowded due to urbanization and people have only free space in

countryside

Suggestion

the countryside

. As more and more people are migrating to cities for better future, and already available space for the

construction

has been used. To meet

this

demand

of land, people are turning to

countryside

areas.

For instance

, in a recent poll conducted in china by real estate firm customers are preferring the

city

surroundings to live.

Hence

, to meet

this

increase

demand

of space moving away from

city

Suggestion

the city

good option

Suggestion

a good option

In addition

this

, if

construction

Suggestion

the construction

is done in the areas away from the

city

we can reduce the negative effects of urbanization. Due to the crowded

city

centre citizens are not only facing the problem of traffic but

also

the pollution.

For example

, in a

city

of south India there is a 40% improvement in air quality which have been observed because of building homes around the

city

instead

of in the centre.

Thus

, to improve the quality of life in an urban

area it

Accept comma addition

area, it

is a better solution.

However

, there should be strict rules in regards

with

Suggestion

construction

of buildings with proper ventilation, vegetation zones and spaces between houses in

countryside

construction

. So, to prevent the bad impact of development in those areas. In conclusion, as

population

Suggestion

the population

continuously

seemingly without interruption

continually

moving to cities for better prospects; there is

simultaneous increase

Suggestion

a simultaneous increase

in the

demand

for shelters.

Therefore

countryside

lands can be utilised for

this

purpose to meet the need and to curb the effects of overcrowding.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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