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Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive or negative development?

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Over the centuries nothing excited mankind like
space
, and it is every
bodies
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body's
 dream to travel to
space
 at least once in their lifetime. Millennial man is
luckey
occurring by chance
lucky
 enough to provide with the opportunity to visit
space
 as
tourist
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a tourist
tourists
 because of advancement in technologies
,
Accept space
,
and many think that
space
tourism
 will flourish in
comming
of the relatively near future
coming
 years. For me it seems to be a favourable development.
First
 and foremost
,
Accept space
,
tour to outer universe will bring humongous business possibilities to the
tourism
 industry. Since
space
 has not been explored in the same extent as that of
tourist
 spots on the planet
,
Accept space
,
it is
great opportunity
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a great opportunity
 for
tourism
 companies to extent
to
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of
in
space
,
Accept space
,
for that there will be more takers or customers. The prosperity of
tourism
 can lead to booming of world economy.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
space
tourism
 can reduce the impact of
pollution
 in
tourist
 places on earth to a large extent. Nowadays
tourism
 is a major cause of
pollution
 on the planet as most
tourist
 destination don't have adequate facility to treat or deal with garbage and environmental discharges produced by profound
tourist
 activities, effectively. When
space
tourism
develop
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develops
 more tourists may opt for it and earthly
tourist
 spots may get less congested
,
Accept space
,
can in turn reduce
pollution
.
For instance
, in Thailand visiting to floating islands in the sea is a major
tourist
 attraction, and a study conducted by
Thailand environmental ministry
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the Thailand environmental ministry
 in 2018 revealed that as
number
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the number
 of
tourist
 boats increase the amount of oil discharged into sea from them increased drastically and is having an adverse impact on flora and fauna of the region. In converse, the
worriment
 about
space
tourism
 is regarding the impact that can have on the earthly atmosphere. There
is
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are
 chances that emissions from
space
 shuttles used for
tourism
 polluting the extra
terristrial
of or relating to or inhabiting the land as opposed to the sea or air
terrestrial
territorial
space
.
Accept space
.
A study conducted by ISRO in 2015 showed that air
pollution
 caused by burning of aviation fuel is twice than that of
pollution
 caused by
combustion
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the combustion
 of petrol and
diseal
an internal-combustion engine that burns heavy oil
diesel
.
Accept space
.
But
this
 ill effect can easily
negotiated
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negotiate
 by improving the engines and implementing strict emission standards for
space
 vehicles. To sum up,
space
tourism
 can tremendously contribute to the world GDP and can facilitate to reduce the
pollution
 of
tourist
 spots on earth. Strict regulations and setting stringent emission norms for
space
 vehicles can reduce environmental
pollution
,
Accept space
,
which is pointed
out to as a
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out as a
 negative effect of
space
tourism
. So advancement of
space
tourism
 is a positive development.

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