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Space travel has been made sometime and people think that space tourism will be probably developed in the future. Do you think space travel would be a positive or negative development?

#space #travel #people #tourism #future #development
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Over the centuries nothing excited mankind like
space
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, and it is every
bodies
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body's
 dream to travel to
space
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 at least once in their lifetime. Millennial man is
luckey
occurring by chance
lucky
 enough to provide with the opportunity to visit
space
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 as
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tourist
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a tourist
tourists
 because of advancement in technologies
,
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and many think that
space
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tourism
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 will flourish in
comming
of the relatively near future
coming
 years. For me it seems to be a favourable development.
First
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 and foremost
,
Accept space
,
tour to outer universe will bring humongous business possibilities to the
tourism
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 industry. Since
space
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 has not been explored in the same extent as that of
tourist
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 spots on the planet
,
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,
it is
great opportunity
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a great opportunity
 for
tourism
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 companies to extent
to
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of
in
space
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,
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for that there will be more takers or customers. The prosperity of
tourism
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 can lead to booming of world economy.
Furthermore
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,
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,
space
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tourism
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 can reduce the impact of
pollution
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 in
tourist
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 places on earth to a large extent. Nowadays
tourism
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 is a major cause of
pollution
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 on the planet as most
tourist
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 destination don't have adequate facility to treat or deal with garbage and environmental discharges produced by profound
tourist
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 activities, effectively. When
space
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tourism
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develop
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develops
 more tourists may opt for it and earthly
tourist
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 spots may get less congested
,
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,
can in turn reduce
pollution
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.
For instance
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, in Thailand visiting to floating islands in the sea is a major
tourist
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 attraction, and a study conducted by
Thailand environmental ministry
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the Thailand environmental ministry
 in 2018 revealed that as
number
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the number
 of
tourist
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 boats increase the amount of oil discharged into sea from them increased drastically and is having an adverse impact on flora and fauna of the region. In converse, the
worriment
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 about
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tourism
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 is regarding the impact that can have on the earthly atmosphere. There
is
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are
 chances that emissions from
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 shuttles used for
tourism
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 polluting the extra
terristrial
of or relating to or inhabiting the land as opposed to the sea or air
terrestrial
territorial
space
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.
Accept space
.
A study conducted by ISRO in 2015 showed that air
pollution
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 caused by burning of aviation fuel is twice than that of
pollution
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 caused by
combustion
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the combustion
 of petrol and
diseal
an internal-combustion engine that burns heavy oil
diesel
.
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But
this
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 ill effect can easily
negotiated
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negotiate
 by improving the engines and implementing strict emission standards for
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 vehicles. To sum up,
space
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tourism
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 can tremendously contribute to the world GDP and can facilitate to reduce the
pollution
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 of
tourist
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 spots on earth. Strict regulations and setting stringent emission norms for
space
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 vehicles can reduce environmental
pollution
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,
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which is pointed
out to as a
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out as a
 negative effect of
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tourism
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. So advancement of
space
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tourism
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 is a positive development.

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